This review is about a short story called "Through You" written by raissa2606. It's written in english language and published in 2017. It has a total of 4 completed pages.
The story is telling us about a blind girl and a mysterious guy at the beach. Out of nowhere, the guy is telling the girl about things she can't see. About what is happening at the moment, what color are the sun and the sky, about the birds and the waves, about everything at the beach. At first, the girl goes angry at the boy but things turned around and they become closer.
I think the writer should make an orientation or an opening of the story instead of starting it with a dialogue. It should be started with the girl's perspective or point of view to attach the reader's feelings, and make the readers understand the girl's character. This story uses the chronological plot with no flashbacks at all, so that the readers can understand the story easily.
The writer of this story didn't name the character, the writer only uses the guy and the girl. This technique is very good to me because it can expand the reader's imagination and let them name the characters by themselves. From the story, we know that the guy's character is really bold because he talks to the girl without any hesitation. We also know that the girl is brave and not afraid to defend herself even though in this situation the guy is not a bad guy.
The writing style of this story is really easy to understand, to the point, and not long-winded. But, i think the writer should add more vocabulary to the story because it seems a little boring and flat. For example, the writer uses the word 'suddenly' twice when the guy talks and holds her hand. It doesn't seem right and things are happening too quickly.
I don't see any grammar errors and the writer uses past tense and the first point of view which is from the girl's character.
Overall, i think it is a very touching story and the tension in the last scenes are able to make the reader's heart beating fast. I love that it ends with a happy ending and doesn't leave me hanging. This story can be read by anyone and has a good moral. Which is not to judge a book by it's cover or to judge by appearance only. Understanding is important. And also bonding and building a connection with the other person.
The story is telling us about a blind girl and a mysterious guy at the beach. Out of nowhere, the guy is telling the girl about things she can't see. About what is happening at the moment, what color are the sun and the sky, about the birds and the waves, about everything at the beach. At first, the girl goes angry at the boy but things turned around and they become closer.
I think the writer should make an orientation or an opening of the story instead of starting it with a dialogue. It should be started with the girl's perspective or point of view to attach the reader's feelings, and make the readers understand the girl's character. This story uses the chronological plot with no flashbacks at all, so that the readers can understand the story easily.
The writer of this story didn't name the character, the writer only uses the guy and the girl. This technique is very good to me because it can expand the reader's imagination and let them name the characters by themselves. From the story, we know that the guy's character is really bold because he talks to the girl without any hesitation. We also know that the girl is brave and not afraid to defend herself even though in this situation the guy is not a bad guy.
The writing style of this story is really easy to understand, to the point, and not long-winded. But, i think the writer should add more vocabulary to the story because it seems a little boring and flat. For example, the writer uses the word 'suddenly' twice when the guy talks and holds her hand. It doesn't seem right and things are happening too quickly.
I don't see any grammar errors and the writer uses past tense and the first point of view which is from the girl's character.
Overall, i think it is a very touching story and the tension in the last scenes are able to make the reader's heart beating fast. I love that it ends with a happy ending and doesn't leave me hanging. This story can be read by anyone and has a good moral. Which is not to judge a book by it's cover or to judge by appearance only. Understanding is important. And also bonding and building a connection with the other person.